Beginning with the word There. Of course, we can find instances in which books begin with
this vague word, but why? Using a nondescript word is like giving the reader a
tranquilizer. There doesn’t encourage interest or build curiosity. Vague words
weaken sentences. Instead, use action verbs and descriptive nouns to create a
vivid world for the reader to imagine. When writing, I like to think of three
children in my target audience reading my words. I want to string the words together so that each
reader will “see” a similar image or action. Forming mental pictures is much
more difficult to accomplish when using an imprecise word, such as there.
Should there be
used, at all? We use this word in our language; therefore it can be reflected
in our writing, as well, just not at the beginning of a strong sentence.
Example: There is a mountain so high it
seems to scrape the clouds. More specific is The high mountain seemed to touch the clouds. The subject is
“mountain,” and placing it at the beginning of the sentence immediately forms a
visual for the reader.
Here’s an exception. There can be acceptable, especially in dialog, even as the
beginning word. “There, there, there. You’ll be okay.” Or “There it is!”
Watch for ways to make your writing stronger. Now,
there’s an idea.
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I totally agree with you about the word "there." It's too passive and unnecessary.
ReplyDeleteGood reminder to us. Very helpful for the editing process. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThe key to good writing is rewriting. Rosi, you're right, the editing process is a must. Susan, I agree, passive and unnecessary words strip the flavor out of writing.
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